A theoretical government for a novel I'm writing. Opinions?

The story is called The Lord Protector. At one point in the story the protagonist is among a society that resembles Scottish clans. I have been working out a system of government for them, because he is influenced by it (important to the plot as he is a leader himself) and here’s what I’ve come up with.

The basic societal unit is the Household, which consists of two parents, their children, and their son’s wives if they have no offspring. Once a couple has children, they become a seperate Household.

A Family consists of many households. At the head of each Family is an elder - the oldest matron or patron of the line. All of their offspring and their spouses constitute their Family. Some people belong to more than one Family through marriage. When an elder dies, his or her direct descendents decide who will inherit the eldership (either from amongst themselves or from the late elder’s siblings). If no decision can be reached within twenty days, the eldest survivor (sibling or offspring) assumes the role.

A Family usually has around 100 adults at any time.

Families form loose associations called Clans which can consist of anywhere between 10 and 40 Families (by law, no more or less). Clans form councils with the elders of their respective families. The elders meet on a yearly basis to elect a single counsilor - not necessarily an elder - to represent them in the national council. The national council serves as a court where clans or families of different clans have conflicts, but has no legislative power.

The main structure of government comes from the tuori, which are courts and their attendent police forces. Any elder can form a tuor, and they make the laws which will govern those under their jurisdiction. But here’s where it gets interesting: The head of every household decides which tuor will serve them.

The result is that there are no states. Law is polycentric, as each houshold decides which code of law they will follow. If two people from different tuori have a conflict, their respective elders choose a third party to review the case. Appeals work in the same way - a person has the right to appeal the decision of even their own tuor to a third party for review.

Laws tend to resemble Anglo-Saxon Common Law, where people and their property are given consideration before anything else. However, some tuor have stricter codes, and participation in such codes for a certain period of time gives a person a sort of “certification” to different trades. For example, there are tuori that train people to be warriors, and others that train people in religious practice, or leadership roles. Such things qualify people to become councilors, military officers, advisors or even priests (the Clansmen practice a sort of proto-Christianity, or their traditional polycentric religion, or secularized practices derived from either of them. )

In the event of crisis, the elders of the clans can order the tuori affiliated with their clan to arms. This is usually done when a tuor or a particular clan refuses to abide by a third party decision, or when there is a threat from abroad. The national Council can order ALL the tuori to arms in the case of such a threat. However, there is no standing army. For one thing, such an order expires after thirty days and the tuori are then left to decide whether to continue fighting or not, if the crisis still exists. Most of the time, they do as a matter of honor. In fact, since tuori are eager to look good in the public eye, they usually volunteer their service and no mandatory call to arms is issued.

Punishment usually follows an eye-for-an-eye-plus-interest system. You break it, you pay for it with compensation for inconvenience. You steal it, you return it with interest. You hurt another person, you get flogged and pay for their doctor’s bills and time lost. Hovever, a person convicted of a violent crime usually offers a monetary payment to buy their way out of being flogged. Debts are usually worked off indirectly - an official of the tuor that represents the victim takes a portion of their wages and brings it to the victim until the debt is payed. There is not really any direct slavery (although sometimes if both parties prefer it, it works out that way - one of the main character’s friends becomes a slave to a woman and ends up marrying her).
However, there are “work farms” where recalcitrant criminals go.

While a murderer is subject to the death penalty, they have the option of becoming a slave instead - but that is the decision of the victim’s family.

Rapists, without exception, are castrated and ostracized (that is, they are denied representation by any tuor ever again.)

Ostracism also works as an effective deterrent for bad behavior. If someone is a generally horrible person, but they don’t actually break any laws (child neglect, for example, is not a crime) the tuori will simply refuse to represent them. So a person who is uncivil, or does legal things of which nobody approves (such as not feeding their kids), or who doesn’t cooperate with the tuori system is left without any representation - effectively naked and undefended if anyone wanted to do them harm. As a result, ostracism is used among the more civil clans more often than physical punishment, and criminals will frequently pay for the privilege of staying within the tuori rather than being left to fend for themselves.

I should note, however, that there are people who choose not to be represented by any tuori voluntarily. Those are usually people with a lot of money to pay for protection of their own. They are often sought out as independent agencies to go after criminal bands and to raid accross foreign borders, which tuori are forbidden to do themselves. So if a campaign against a foreign threat becomes offensive, the independent agents will lead it and the tuori will send their soldiers to serve under their command. Marcail, the hero, is one of these independents (another vital plot point).

So, tell me what you think about it. It’s based on the Brehon laws of ancient Ireland, with a few modifications.

Be as frank and open as necessary.

Based on my limited knowledge it sounds a lot like anarchy in Somalia.

I don’t know how far you’ve gotten in the novel or what exactly it’s going to be about besides how the “government” works. But it would be neat if you made it set in the future or even modern times, although I will admit I’m a science fiction lover. If don’t know how up front the government system is in the novel. Whether it’s just used as a backdrop or it’s a central theme. But if you made it set in the present or future people who might not be anarchists or minarchists reading the novel might stop and think “wow this might actually work” wheras if you had it set in the past people would probably think “that’s an interesting system of government but it’s based thousand(s) of years in the past and could never work in modern times”.

It’s actually not much like Somalia. Somalia is a bunch of unorganized semi-socialist governments competing for power by force. The system I depicted is one where there is free and peaceful competition between providors of law and justice, rather like anarcho-capitalism but without any real property ethic (and with heavy restrictions on entry into the “market”).

As far as the story’s setting goes: it takes place “now” but on another planet. The focus of the story is that at some point in our distant past, an antedeluvian culture developed interplanetary travel. The technology is long-lost. The story is about a culture that developed parallel to our own. It focuses heavily on economic problems created by the fact that the remaining ancient technology is controlled by the ruling class, and that it is considered sacreligeous to invent anything new. Sort of like the society in Rand’s Anthem only with a technological level close to our own around 1900.

My treatment of the various governments in the story has a very Hoppean twist, but the one I described is not really central to the story per se. It does, however, serve to influence the political beliefs of the protagonist when he comes into his own as a revolutionary leader (much later in the story).

Well I like it. I think it captures the feel of Brehon Ireland well (that is the first thing that came to mind when reading it.) I am attempting to do something similar with the dark elves of the world I am writing, wherein I try and preserve their matriarchal structure but give it an anarcho-capitalist flavour by making membership of each noble house conditional on being accepted in its ranks (thus joining the nobility), and the domain of a noble house those who voluntarily affiliate with it. I created a tiered system, with upper (ruled each by a matriarch or patriarch whose position is inherited) and lower noble houses, the former being 7 elite houses which serve the function of arbiters of justice, and the lower noble houses serving as their armed enforcers as well as other functions. The 7 ruling houses (plus some independent associations, like a sorcerer’s guild) act as though they were PDAs, since they must obtain their funding and the allegiance of their followers (including the lower noble houses) voluntarily. So on the outside, for all appearances, the system is a Platonic aristocracy, but on a deeper examination it is anarchist.

When you say your protagonist is revolutionary, how do you mean so?

Well… I’ll tell you as much as I can without spoiling the whole plot. In the nation to the south of the society I described, they have a constitutional republic that empowers a particular office - that of the Lord Protector - to oppose the government. That’s his job, per the constitution. The High Lord (more like a parliamentary Prime Minister than our President) controls the national army, the Lord Protector leads the civilian militia. His only constitutional role is to maintain a force against the central government. Unlike other offices, his is hereditary, though subject to removal by popular vote.

However, the story takes place about 60 years after a coup by the High House that effectively eliminated the Lord Protectorship, making the LP the henchman of the High House. The current LP is the bastard son of the High Lord, and to put it concisely they disagree on policy. The High Lord is a Lincoln-esque maniac, and his son is something like their world’s version of a Jeffersonian.

Enter Marcail, the protagonist - who is the great-grandson of the Lord Protector who was overthrown in the late coup, making the office lawfully his. The political intrigue is Byzantine and painstakingly detailed (I’ve been working on this for about 8 years now), but the upshot is that Marcail and the current Lord Protector become allies against the High House.

Biggest challenge: trying to balance the political detail and philosophical allegory with that thing called “plot”. I think I’ve found a good synthesis, and I plan to have the first novel (out of probably three) done within a couple of years.

On edit: the censored word sounds like “bass turd”.

Ah. Just add more stars or leave a few letters in. :o)

The story sounds interesting. Sorry I haven’t had a chance to comment on the story you posted to the libertarian speculative ficiton forum yet, I’ve been busy with a couple of dissertation chapters that I have presentation deadlines coming up for.

Inquisitor,

Are you already a member of the libertarian speculative fiction forum I created?

http://libertariansf.freeforums.org/index.php

Anyone else here who is interested in science fiction and fantasy is welcome to join as well.

Oh yea… I knew I recognized you from somewhere. Heh.

And no problem… I’m busy with school myself.

After reading the first post, I was wondering where the dramatic conflict was going to come from–but this post answers that: a different nation with a different government. So is this essentially pitting anarchism against minarchism? Or at least comparing the two?

Comparing them, yes. But the main political theme is that even the most restricted state government must eventually start breaking its own laws and become tyrannical. In the end, the politics only provide a framework for the plot - they are not really the plot itself.

Good, good. Let us know when we can read it. [8-|]

I’ve written quite a bit of the book so far, but only the first thirty-something pages are chronologically coherent. If anyone would like to read them, let me know.